Appearance section, p.34
| Affects | Status | Importance | Assigned to | Milestone | |
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| Ubuntu Manual |
Fix Released
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Undecided
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Kevin Godby | ||
Bug Description
Rev. 788
Ch. 2, § "Appearance", p. 34 (PDF p. 36)
Type: rewrite suggestion
Manual has:
To further modify the look and feel of your desktop such as the background, fonts, and window theme, you can do so through Appearance Preferences.
The background, fonts, and window theme are better described as aspects of the look and feel, not the look and feel itself; such as really ought to be preceded by a comma; and the end does not match the beginning. "You can do so through [...]" is more appropriate to a sentence beginning "if you wish to [...]", whereas "to further modify [...]" is better partnered with "you can use [...]"
So my suggestion is:
To further modify the look and feel of your desktop, you can change the background, fonts, and window theme. To begin, navigate to System > Preferences > Appearances in the top panel.
This is simpler and "begin" helps to lead into the following sections.
Related branches
| Changed in ubuntu-manual: | |
| assignee: | nobody → Kevin Godby (godbyk) |
| milestone: | none → edition-2 |
| status: | New → In Progress |
| Kevin Godby (godbyk) wrote | #1 |
| Changed in ubuntu-manual: | |
| status: | In Progress → Fix Committed |
| Changed in ubuntu-manual: | |
| status: | Fix Committed → Fix Released |
I've rewritten that section as:
"You can change the background, fonts, and window theme to further modify the
look and feel of your desktop. To begin, open the \application{
Preferences} by navigating to \menu{System\then Preferences\then Appearances}
in the top panel."
Feel free to reopen this bug if you have any criticisms of the new text.
Thanks!