Comma splice on p.34 & Suggestions for rewrite

Bug #585397 reported by Marc Stewart
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Affects Status Importance Assigned to Milestone
Ubuntu Manual
Fix Released
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Kevin Godby

Bug Description

Rev. 788
Ch. 2, § "Theme", p. 34 (PDF p.36)
Types: grammar, suggestions

Manual has:
The theme called “Ambiance” is enabled by default, however, you will see there are seven other default themes to choose from in the list.

There is a comma splice before "however" here.
"Enabled" has the wrong connotation. "Used" is more appropriate.
"In the list" would probably be better earlier in the sentence, if used at all.

Suggestion:
The "Ambiance" theme is used by default, but there are seven other themes you can choose from. Just click once on the theme you want to try, and the changes will take effect immediately.

Kevin Godby (godbyk)
Changed in ubuntu-manual:
assignee: nobody → Kevin Godby (godbyk)
status: New → In Progress
milestone: none → edition-2
Revision history for this message
Kevin Godby (godbyk) wrote :

I've fixed this in the second edition. Thanks!

Changed in ubuntu-manual:
status: In Progress → Fix Committed
Changed in ubuntu-manual:
status: Fix Committed → Fix Released
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